The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel

to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant.

Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12
The given bar graph illustrates data related to the
number
of trips that children,
age
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of
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5 to 12, using types of means,
such
as car passenger, walking, cycling, walking
and
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bus, and bus,
with
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in
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1990 and 2010 respectively. Units
is
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are
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measured in
millions
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the sector of walking acquired
highest
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the highest
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deal in1990,
while
lowest
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the lowest
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category is car
passenger
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passengers
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in the same period, which
is
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experienced
top
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at top
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of the
number
in
second
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survey. In
the
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terms of the year
of
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1990
that
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the first investigation, Having greatest amount is walking, recording over 12
millions
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million
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,
whereas
that of 2010
gain
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gained
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6
millions
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million
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, which is a half
number
in
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difference.
In addition
,
this
amount is almost
same
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the same
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deal with the way of cycling and walking and bus from 1990. Regarding the survey result in 2010, in
this
year, all
sector
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sectors
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are dropped down without car passenger area.
This
category which
having
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has
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only
difference
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a difference
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feature in 2010’s data
obtain
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obtained
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approximately 4
millions
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million
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in
first
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investigation, which
be
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is
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able to explain that
this
is
lowest
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the lowest
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number
.
However
, in the second search,
this
topic moved to around 11
millions
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million
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and it
also
recoded
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recorded
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highest
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the highest
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score in 2010.
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