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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that the topic of the main agenda of scientific discoveries is to better
people
's
lives
. I moderately agree with that notion and will give my rationale. In today's age, science has far surpassed what was of the 20th century,
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 including the advancement of medical discoveries. Take the black death as an example; with founded knowledge of sanitation and the development of medications, the plaque that everyone in the 19th century feared is now a long-forgotten memory. Recent events, most notably the COVID-19 Pandemic (bỏ which), forced
people
 to develop a vaccine as soon as possible, decreasing casualties by millions. With that being said, scientific advancement in the medical field has significantly contributed to the improvement of human beings.
On the other hand
, leaving room for other agendas is
also
 a must because it may
also
 indirectly add positively to the
lives
 of
people
.
For instance
, Space X is a well-known organization
that is
 finding a way to space travel and, in the future, maybe to sustain life on Mars. Though starting out with the goal of living on Mars, the founder, Elon Musk, did stumble through challenges, but with the rise of the company, other inventions have been born and made our
lives
 improve,
such
 as electric cars, funding for anti-hunger movements, and so on. It can be seen that with the pursuit of other aims, science can indirectly change the way
people
 live better. In conclusion, with or without aiming for the betterment of human civilization, scientific discoveries always find a way to make a positive impact on our
lives
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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