Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (Band 6)

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Nowadays
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towards
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western
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despite that they are forgetting their
culture
day by day. Some
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ancient
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crowd have
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interest in
culture
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intend to analyse both
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in the forthcoming paragraphs
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shall clearly explain my perspectives. There are worthwhile reasons why folks are not taking
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in their own traditional
culture
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and foremost
is that
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if an individual follow their rule and
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they may not
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in their
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. so that, they prefer to go to the new
culture
where they can get
eaisly
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easily
job.
For instance
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young people
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learn
new
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language for going to
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where they want to earn more money
as well as
a better future not only
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himself
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but
also
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family.
Moreover
,
people
take non-vegetarian food because they think that it has a lot of minerals and
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that will give
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healthy food to them but if they take
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vegetarian food
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which
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more amount of calories and proteins that would
beneficial
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for them. On the other legitimate side, traditional
culture
is
must
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a must
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for every society because they learn different skills from their
culture
.
To begin
with, old
culture
has
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value in all countries as
this
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us an emotional bonding and respect to own country which bestow honourable feeling to every masses.
hence
,
people
should follow their own
culture
.
for
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example, in South INDIA, where women wear
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if they go to
other city
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they do not forget their
culture
. In conclusion,
although
a new
culture
gives more benefit to the
people
than their own
culture
still, following own
culture
offer a humour feeling
whereever
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wherever
they live whether outside or inside.
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