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ou recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter, – explain that you would like to apply for the job – give some details of any relevant experience that you have – specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Manager, I am writing to express my interest in the part-time job you advertised in the Sunday Mirror
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. I am Jennifer Ramos, studying at Ulster University, London, for post-graduation in Hospitality Management. I have been doing part-time jobs to cover my personal expenses to avoid bothering my parents.
Moreover
, these jobs give giving practical experiences for my studies. I have relevant experience in different restaurants in the city which includes McDonald's, KFC and Burger King.
Last
 two years I have been working in these restaurants as a waiter and
later
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 promoted to service supervisor. Your brand is
well known
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 in the industry for its own cuisine.
Therefore
 I wish to work with you to explore more. I have lectured at the college every Monday and Wednesday morning times,
therefore
, I prefer the evening shift on that day. I am
also
 ready to work night shifts. Please consider my application. Look forward to seeing you, Yours faithfully, Jennifer Ramos
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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