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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the information regarding the average money spent yearly on cell
phone
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
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, expenses consumed by the landline
phone
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 decreased in the period considered
while
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 the reverse trend was shown by the mobile
phone
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services
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.
To begin
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 with mobile
phone
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services
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, in 2001, consumers spent nearly 200
dollars
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 which increased to 300
dollars
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 in the next
year
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 followed by a very feeble increment in the
year
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 2003. After that
year
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, the service amount inclined steadily till 2007, reaching $600.
However
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, in the subsequent
year
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 ,there was a slight decline and later the value geared up and touched approximately 700
dollars
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 in the final
year
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 of the considered period. It is evident that, in residential
services
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, people gave the maximum amount of 700
dollars
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 per month in the
year
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 2001.Following that
year
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, there was
continuous
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 decline in the rate given for the
services
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 to $550 in 2007, but in the
year
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 2008 , the service rate rose by a small currency value and showed a decreasing figure in all the upcoming years of the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, dollars, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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