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People buy a product if it fulfils their needs; there is no need for advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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The need for various items will differ from one person to another.
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 there are a number of
adds
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ads
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 on the market that promote even the basic necessities of human life. I partially disagree
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fact
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the fact
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 of not needing advertisements
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for
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 certain
products
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. Commercials are produced in
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 way that helps in educating people about the items they are unaware of.
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 with , there is a vast diversity in the range of
products
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 that individuals use on a day-to-day basis, but , they have no idea of the composition of the
products
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 and what they are used for. In that case, promotions come into action , thereby, providing folks with knowledge regarding the wide range and how it is manufactured.
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, there are many toothpaste brands out there on the market , but people are not acquainted with the benefits and different purposes
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on
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 how it is being utilized .
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this
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, individuals will get to know information about the paste only through commercials.
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, a huge population prefer to stick to
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products
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 they have been using all their life and have no reason to change
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 as it works for them . In that case , advertisements are of no use and folks prefer not to watch unnecessary broadcasting.
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, my mother has been using Head and shoulders shampoo for the past decade and she does not care to watch any promotion related to shampoo because she has no idea of changing it. In conclusion, I believe,
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adds
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ads
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 regarding any object used in daily life
is
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 important for those who have no knowledge in regard to the
products
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 and what they are used for. Yet, it is the individual's choice to not watch it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer awareness
  • brand image
  • unique selling proposition (USP)
  • target audience
  • competitive advantage
  • market saturation
  • perception
  • demand generation
  • informative content
  • persuasive techniques
  • brand loyalty
  • mass media
  • consumer behavior
  • advertising campaign
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