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The tables show how many international student studies in canada and the united states by country of origin

The tables show how many international student studies in canada and the united states by country of origin
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The display tables describe how many international students
studies
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study
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 in Canada and the United States by country of origin.
Firstly
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,In Canada, in
China
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, in the
year
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 2002, it was 5400, in the
USA
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 in the
year
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 2002 it was 5000, in
India
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 in the
year
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 2002 it was 2100 and the total of the
year
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 2002
it
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was 59870. In the
year
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 2003, in
China
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 it was 7850, in the
USA
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 it was 5450, in
India
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 it was 2835 and the total was 70004. The
change
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 in
China
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 was +45%, in the
USA
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 it was +9%, in
India
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 it was +35% and the total was +17%.
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,In the
USA
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, in
China
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, in the
year
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2002
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 it was 110000 and in 2003 it was 116600 and the
change
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 was +6%.
Thirdly
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, In
India
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, in the
year
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2002
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,2002
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 it was 200000, in the
year
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 2003 it was 182000 and
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change
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the change
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 is -9%, in Canada, in the
year
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 2002, it was 31000, but in the
year
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 2003 it was 33170 and the
change
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 was +7%. The total in 2002 was 581600, in the
year
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 2003 it was 592230 and the
change
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 was +2%.
To conclude
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, the above information describes the data about the
year
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 2002
as well as
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 2003.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, year, usa, india, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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