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Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the imported
food
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 should be limited by governments, and they should primarily consume local
products
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.
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 essay strongly agrees with
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 statement because
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 will improve the local companies and the country's
economy
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, and it will reduce the costs of the expenses on the country. Limiting imported
food
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 will contribute to developing the regional businesses. If the
state
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 decided to reduce the amount of
food
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 which is being bought from abroad, it would benefit domestic companies because citizens would start to buy from them.
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, it will even lead the
economy
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 of the government itself to thrive, so
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 is a win for everyone.
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, in 2018, Saudi Arabia decided to decrease the imported provisions by 50%; after only 3 years, the provincial firms had made exceptional profits, and the local
economy
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 had increased by 24% since
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. Another reason why nations should consider diminishing imported goods is the
reducing
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 of the financial costs borne by the
state
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. If you think that purchasing overseas
products
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 does not cost that much, I'm afraid to tell you
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is
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 a huge lie. There are a lot of things that the
state
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 should pay for
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, so
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 the
products
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 could be delivered,
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 as international customs duties, freight charges, and many more.
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, the Kuwaiti Ministry of Finance has recently reported that 15% of the annual payments that the
state
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 affords are for globally sourced
food
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, and
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 is not a small percentage, by the way. In conclusion, importing
food
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 or goods places a significant financial burden on the
state
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. By reducing imports to a certain extent and increasing reliance on locally produced
products
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, the country can strengthen its
economy
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while
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 simultaneously supporting local businesses.

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development
Explain each idea more. Add detail so your points feel full.
balance
Add a short view of the other side, or say where your view may not hold.
evidence
Check facts and data. Use clear facts that are easy to trust.
linguistic
Fix hard words and formal tone. Avoid phrases like 'huge lie'.
structure
End with a strong restatement of your view and a brief summary.
content
You take a clear view and give reasons.
organization
You use linking words to join ideas well.
evidence
Examples fit the task and support your points.
coherence
Parag spaces are used in a good order to show flow.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestically produced food
  • agricultural sector
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • food security
  • global market fluctuations
  • trade disputes
  • local food production
  • dietary variety
  • international trade relations
  • retaliation
  • exports
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