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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to waht extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books #waht
Nowadays, the influence of modern technologies and computers has drastically increased. Parents start
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 that the waste of time every day in front of a monitor might have a harmful effect on their child.
This
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 possible health problems caused by the lack of activity. Children
thend
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tend
then
 to replace all sports and regular walks
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computer
 games. The situation gets worse when they do not
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an
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attention to the surrounding environment.
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 chair might cause problems with
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 spine and
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 wrong distance between the eyes and the monitor might cause sight problems. More than that, some
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youth
 fall into
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escapism and forget about the real
world
. When they grow up, it might be hard to socialize and become a part of society.
On the other hand
, a
computer
 and the internet
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 become an
unseparable
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inseparable
 part of our life. Learning the skills of usage is essential to be able to survive in the modern
world
. Research from The Guardian has discovered that over
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 of the modern
world
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,world
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 population are using
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a computer
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computer
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 on
the
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 everyday basis.
This
 depicts that it is necessary to have
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advanced
computer
 skills to be successful in a future society. In the end, it might be said that all the negative aspects of the usage of the modern
technologes
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technologies
technology
 might be neutralized by its correct usage. Creating the right environment might help to avoid any
enjuries
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injuries
 and often
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brakes
breaks
 and a park walk will keep you
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healthy. It is vital to keep a balance and find
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time to enjoy
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life outside the electronic
world
.
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