The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries.
The tables
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the information about five
European
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monetary
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fairtrade-labelled coffee and
bananas
in 1999 and 2004. As an overview, In
European
countries coffee and
bananas
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highly exported in 2004,
while
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to 1999
bananas
sales
are
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increased in
switzeland
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Switzerland
in 2004.
To begin
with, The United
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trading
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coffe
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coffee
in 1999 at 1.5
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and in
next
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five
years
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trade
increases
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rapidly to 20
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.
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, Switzerland
have been selling
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sold
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coffe
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coffee
at 3
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in 1999,
while
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double
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.
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,
Denmark
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in Denmark
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in 1999
coffe
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coffee
was
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at 1.8
millions
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and in 200 it leapted up to 2
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.
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,Belgium has
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1
milions
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million
millions
in 1999
while
scanning in 2004 it
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1,7
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by 1,7
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millions
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.
Finally
, Sweden has the lowest trading
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countries in 1999 and 2004. I
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, Switzerland has
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15
million
in 1999
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it
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47
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million
in 2004.
However
, The United
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sales
bananas
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of bananas
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1
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million
in 1999 and in 2004 soared
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to 5.5
million
.
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, Belgium
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selled
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a
low level of
bananas
in 1999,
while
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to other nations
and
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it
raised
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to 4
million
in 2004.
Moreover
, Sweden
has
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traded
the
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bananas
to
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1.8
million
in 1999
while
study to 2004 it
down
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to 1
millions
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of
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euros.
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, Denmark
has supplying
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the
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bananas
at 0.8
million
in 2004
while
link
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to other nations it
has
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the
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small trade in
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unions
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histoery
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history
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words european, bananas, millions, million with synonyms.
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  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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