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The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The display chart gives the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia . The below information describes the number of people employed in the
year
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 2001 and 2008. The data is on some items like
sales
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, computing, accounting, nursing and farming in the years 2001 and 2008. In the
year
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 2001,
sales
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 were 180000, computing was 100000, accounting was 90000, nursing was 40000 and farming was 30000. In the
year
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 2008,
sales
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 were 190000, computing was 110000, accounting was around 80000, nursing was more than 50000 and farming was 20000. The highest in 2001 was in
sales
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 and the highest in the
year
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 2008 was
also
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sales
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. There is some difference in the
year
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 2001 and 2008. The data is on certain regions only.
To conclude
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, the above information describes the number of people employed in Australia in the
year
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 2001
as well as
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 2008.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • workforce
  • sector
  • industry
  • agriculture
  • services
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • notable increases/decreases
  • statistical data
  • regional employment patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage points
  • employment rate
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