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Some people think that going to a fitness centre regularly is unnecessary. Instead, they believe that combining occasional exercise (such as going for walks) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
sports
 centre numbers have been increasing. They can be considered as a growing sector. They are so popular and
people
 tend to believe that fitness centre membership is a must be healthy. I firmly believe that
this
 is unnecessary. It is certain that a balanced life, which means having a healthy diet, exercise
such
 as walking, cycling,
aerobic
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 etc., and a well-managed stress level, is essential to stay healthy. There is no need to spend a big amount of money on membership. I used to have a membership in a fitness centre. I believed that I could do different kinds of exercise to feel amazing and stronger.
However
, I couldn’t go regularly to there. Whenever I was there, I didn’t feel happy
due to
 the high level of noisy music and crowd. I
also
 found some
people
 very rude
while
 dressing in changing rooms. Sometimes, I felt like a hamster who runs over the turning on mills every time. After that, I realized that walking outside made me happier compared to a
sports
 club.
Nevertheless
, It is not easy to find some special facilities or activities outside,
such
 as a swimming pool or doing far-east
sports
. If you need more special activities, it is necessary to attend a club.
Moreover
, some
people
 like to socialise with other
people
 at the gym centres. They can feel more confident and more entertained
while
 doing sport there.
It is clear that
 it is not necessary to attend a club for health purposes. Easy activities and small movements are just enough as an exercise.
This
 should be supported with a diet which suitable for your health and life conditions.
However
, if
people
 are aware of these, they can feel free attend to the
sports
 centres.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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