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The pie chart illustrates the causes of world wilde
land
disapperances
and the table explains the causes of Correct your spelling
disappearances
disappearance
land
degradation by region.
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such
as deforestation, Over- cultivation , Over
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, deforestation
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the deforestation
percentage
was 30%. That percentage
was less than the over-grazing percentages
. 35% of Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
over - grazing
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overgrazing
percentage
. Therefore
agricultural lands had becomes
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percentage
was 28%.
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America
Europe
, Oceania
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and Oceania
Furthermore
, Europe
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Europe's
percentage
was increasing than the the others
regions. The Correct quantifier usage
other
Percentage
was 9.8% as well as
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Europe
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the other
Over
cultivation Change preposition
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percentage
was less than the Europe
country parentage. Correct your spelling
European
Over - grazing
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Overgrazing
percentage
was maximum
in Oceania Correct article usage
the maximum
percentage
.
Overall
, in 1990, Europe
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Europe's
acicultural
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agricultural
land
had becomes
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productive
other
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two countries
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of total
land
degraded in Europe
country in 1990.Submitted by heshanij9 on
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