The Pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes Iess productivitive. The table shows how these causes affected regions of the world during the 1990s.

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The pie chart illustrates the causes of world wilde

land

disapperances

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disappearances

disappearance

and the table explains the causes of

land

degradation by region.

To begin

with,

according to

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apply

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the pie chart shows four reasons,

such

as deforestation, Over- cultivation ,

Over

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- grazing and others.

Firstly

deforestation

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the deforestation

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percentage

was 30%. That

percentage

was less than the over-grazing

percentages

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percentage

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. 35% of

over - grazing

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overgrazing

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percentage

Therefore

agricultural lands

had becomes

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have become

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less

productivity

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productive

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. Over- cultivation

percentage

was 28%.

In addition

thee

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other

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countries

were

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apply

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faced

that

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with that

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situation,

such

as North

American

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America

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Europe

Oceania

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and Oceania

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Furthermore

Europe

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Europe's

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deforestation

percentage

was increasing than the the

others

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other

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regions. The

Percentage

was 9.8%

as well as

over -cultivation

was

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apply

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rose in

Europe

country. but

other

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the other

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two countries

Over

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apply

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cultivation

percentage

was less than the

Europe

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European

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country parentage.

Over - grazing

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Overgrazing

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percentage

was

maximum

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the maximum

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in Oceania

percentage

Overall

, in 1990,

Europe

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Europe's

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acicultural

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agricultural

land

had

becomes

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become

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less

product

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productive

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than

other

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the other

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twoCountries

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two countries

. 23%

total

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of total

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land

degraded in

Europe

country in 1990.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

162 words

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