The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018
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represent
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the information about
sea
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the sea
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mam Mel
population
in Gormez straits between 2006 and 2018
Overall
,
seals
and
whales
experienced fluctuation in numbers.
While
Dolphins showed an upward trend throughout the period.
Although
Dolphins
initially
had a lower
rate
,
it
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they
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out raced
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outraced
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Seals
and
Whales
at the end
of the period.
Seals
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The seals
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population
rate
was about 43 in 2011, being higher than other sea animal
rate
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rates
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by approximately 25.
Then
it
,
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decreased to around 13 in 2010.
However
, the figures showed a slight
rose
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rise
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in numbers to about 8 in 2014 and continued to
increased
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steadily to the end of the period reaching around 45.
Whales
recorded number was nearly 25 in the year 2006 and
constant
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remained
same
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the same
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in 2010.
But
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it experienced
decline
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a decline
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steady in
rate
2014 and by the end of year
population
become about 25.
Dolphins
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The dolphins
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population
in Gormez straits was nearly 18 in 2006
,
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and experienced
a
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steady growth during all
this
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years. It rose to approximately 53 and remained steady, outracing the
rate
of
seals
and
whales
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whale populations
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population
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, seals, whales, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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