The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

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the information about

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the sea

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mam Mel

population

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in Gormez straits between 2006 and 2018

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seals

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and

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experienced fluctuation in numbers.

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Dolphins showed an upward trend throughout the period.

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Dolphins

initially

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had a lower

rate

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out raced

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at the end

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of the period.

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Seals

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The seals

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population

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rate

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was about 43 in 2011, being higher than other sea animal

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rate

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by approximately 25.

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decreased to around 13 in 2010.

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, the figures showed a slight

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in numbers to about 8 in 2014 and continued to

increased

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steadily to the end of the period reaching around 45.

Whales

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recorded number was nearly 25 in the year 2006 and

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remained

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in 2010.

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it experienced

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steady in

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2014 and by the end of year

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become about 25.

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The dolphins

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population

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in Gormez straits was nearly 18 in 2006

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and experienced

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steady growth during all

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years. It rose to approximately 53 and remained steady, outracing the

rate

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seals

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and

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whales

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whale populations

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population

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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5 paragraphs

177 words

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The bar chart below show numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in todays world, subjects like Science and technology are most important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. do you think this positive or negative development?

Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in rural areas. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.