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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

#people #phones #texts #disadvatages
In our modern world,
people
 are keeping their
face
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 down rather than facing straight.
This
 habit is followed by everyone during walking, eating and so on.
This
 is because many
people
 are
onto
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 their
phone
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everytime
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. They are addicted to it.
This
 made
people
 not
to
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spend much time in the outside environment and engage with the other members. Most of them who doing
this
 are youngsters.
Due to
this
, they are
getting
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afraid to talk to other men or women even if they
had
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 a reason to talk to them or if they need some help. So,
this
 made the crowd
to
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use their mobile phones
for sending
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 messages more than talking to them directly. I think we have more disadvantages than advantages here.
This
 is because teens are getting scared to talk with others.
This
 induces a lack of communication
skill
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 for the person.
Also
,
people
 use short forms for some words which may make the reader a little
tensed
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 because they don't know those and
also
 might get a feeling of being rude to the reader.But for some
reasons
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this
 is good. By
this
 we
this
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we won't be disturbing other persons in their tough or busy hours , we can able to notify them when the person is unavailable, we
also
 have a written statement of proof etc. I believe that both texting and talking to others
are
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 good if it is maintained at a balanced level.But we need to focus more on talking which may give more ideas and get to know how the
people
 are .
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