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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So, then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 period of technology, many individuals argue that
news
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 has no connection to people’s lives. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
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 notion, and my opinion will be discussed in
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 paragraphs. After which I will lead to a logical conclusion. Supporting my disagreement
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 the given statement, I firmly believe that digital
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or traditional
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 play an important role in people’
live
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 nowadays. In the light of the fact that
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this
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This
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 can help people get more information happened
in
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 that day around the earth. To cite an example, if we do not read a
newspaper
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 we cannot know about the war between Russia and Ukraine.
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,
watch
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 television
news
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 programs like BBC or CNN can help
individual
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individuals
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 gain more knowledge about rules or
policy
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policies
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.
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, in Viet Nam there is a
news
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 channel called VTV1
starts
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that starts
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 at 19:00 every day,
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this
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 channel contains
overall
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 information in Viet Nam and around the world in general to convey back to
Vietnamese
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the Vietnamese
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 people. Explaining some of the
another supporting points
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in
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apply
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against
this
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 statement, it is true that watching
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news
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the news
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 on
televisions
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television
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 every day or
read
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reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 can help global citizen
can
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know what
happened
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is happening
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 around the world or in their country.
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, people who live far away from their motherland can see special events via
a
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TV or read the digital
newspaper
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.
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, that can make them feel less homesick when they are far away.
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, reading the
newspaper
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 or watching
televisions
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television
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news
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 programs do not waste people’s time, they make individuals gain more knowledge. I believe that
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 points are strongly supporting my view of
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the points
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