Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So, then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
period of technology, many individuals argue that
news
has no connection to people’s lives. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
notion, and my opinion will be discussed in
further
paragraphs. After which I will lead to a logical conclusion. Supporting my disagreement
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the given statement, I firmly believe that digital
newspaper
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newspapers
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or traditional
newspaper
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play an important role in people’
live
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nowadays. In the light of the fact that
this
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can help people get more information happened
in
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that day around the earth. To cite an example, if we do not read a
newspaper
we cannot know about the war between Russia and Ukraine.
In addition
,
watch
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television
news
programs like BBC or CNN can help
individual
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individuals
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gain more knowledge about rules or
policy
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.
For instance
, in Viet Nam there is a
news
channel called VTV1
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at 19:00 every day,
this
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channel contains
overall
information in Viet Nam and around the world in general to convey back to
Vietnamese
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the Vietnamese
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people. Explaining some of the
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in
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against
this
statement, it is true that watching
news
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on
televisions
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every day or
read
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newspaper
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newspapers
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can help global citizen
can
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know what
happened
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around the world or in their country.
As a consequence
, people who live far away from their motherland can see special events via
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TV or read the digital
newspaper
.
Thus
, that can make them feel less homesick when they are far away.
To sum up
, reading the
newspaper
or watching
televisions
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news
programs do not waste people’s time, they make individuals gain more knowledge. I believe that
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points are strongly supporting my view of
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