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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The debate over the importance and benefits of being rich has long been a subject of discussion. Some
people
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 believe that being rich can provide a
person
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 the chance to help other
people
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. In my opinion, it is good to help the poor when a
person
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 is rich but in today's
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, not every rich
person
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 helps the poor.
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due to
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 the unequal distribution of resources, a huge number of
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 are not even able to arrange food for themselves
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 the other side,
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 have unlimited resources but they do not try to help the poor
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 they do charity a little bit but it is not enough.
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 the capitalistic approach,
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 are making money from the money. They prefer investing
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in some businesses
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 of doing charity.
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, there are some personalities in the
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 who
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 the real meaning of life. They earned a lot and now they started projects worldwide to help poor
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.
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, the most renowned personality, "Bill Gates" took the initiative to finance to treatment of polio worldwide. He spent millions of dollars on it and almost achieved the target. In conclusion, in the
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 of capitalism, everyone is thinking of earning more and more.
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 it is right that being rich can give a
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 the opportunity to help the poor
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no one wants to do it except a few personalities. Rich
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 should provide opportunities to poor
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 so that they can earn themselves.
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 can be changed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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