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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts provide figures about how much proportion of each nutrient is available in
Medium
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 baked
potato
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 and Macaroni.
Overall
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,
Carbohydrates
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 constitute the highest nutrient among other
nutrients
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 in both dishes considered.
To begin
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 with, in the
medium
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 baked
potato
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, 36% of the total
nutrients
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 are from
carbohydrates
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.The second major nutrient is
protein
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 which accounts for 25%. Moving
further
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, Glucose and other
nutrients
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 provide an equal amount of nutritional value which is 10% more than the nutritional value provided by
protein
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. Other saturated fat provides the lowest value of about 10%. In
Marconi
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 as well,
Carbohydrates
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 remain as the major nutrient as in the
potato
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 dish which is
medium
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 baked. Macaroni contains 21% of saturated fat , a figure less than twice that of
carbohydrates
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.
Protein
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 and Glucose contribute the same amount
while
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 other
nutrients
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 provide 5%, becoming the least nutrient provider in
Marconi
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.
To conclude
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, Saturated fat is greater in
Marconi
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 than in
medium
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 baked
potato
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whereas
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protein
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 is greater in
potato
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 dish than in
Marconi
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, potato, carbohydrates, nutrients, protein, marconi with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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