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Task 1. The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Task 1. The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The bar chart depicts people who are illiterate and divided into
region
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regions
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 and sex in 2000. At first glance, Arab States, Sub-Saharan Africa, and South
Asia
has
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 the highest percentage of illiteracy people in the
last
 year, and it is
also
 noticeable that
level
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the level
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 of females is generally higher than males. The amount of
female
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females
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 who were uneducated in South
Asia
 was 55%,
while
 the part of
this
 gender in Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa was a bit lower, over 52% and 48%. Latin America and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 had approximately 10%, half of East
Asia
 and Oceania.
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 developed countries
has
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have
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 the lowest
illiteracy
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number of illiteracy
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 individuals (3-4%).
In
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 the other hand,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of illiterate men
were
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 significantly less than women. The lowest proportion is for developed countries (2-3%). The highest proportion was in South
Asia
 and Sub-Saharan Africa, over 35% and 30% and slightly slower in
Arab
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the Arab
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 States. Latin America,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, East
Asia
 and Oceania consisted of only 10%.
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