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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both views.

#parents #mathematics #school #life
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 that
mathematics
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 should not be curriculum in schools.
whereas
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, others believe it should be taught.
This
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 essay will examine both views.
To begin
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 with, some people say that math is not needed anymore because nowadays people use
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programs
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,
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their
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is
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 no benefits
of
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 studying
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curriculum
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a curriculum
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due to
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calculations
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programs
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, in companies and factories
calculate
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 tools are used
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 of
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mathematics
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Therefore
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, it
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 logical that there is no future for
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 subjects.
On the other hand
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,
although
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the
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mathematics
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programs
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 are available, some parents believe the subject should be taught and they support their argument that,maths not just a number but it is a
skills
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assist
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assists
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 in improving the
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 memory and critical thinking
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 when they learn how to solve math question they have to use logic and organise.
Moreover
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, it
tought
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taught
 the skills of problem -solving
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 when dealing with
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their
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 is structure to follow as in solving problems.
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,
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apply
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a survey done in 2023 at Sultan Qaboos University showed that 80% of
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at
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 solving problems and they can manage
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situations perfectly .
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,
lead to
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math
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helps
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 us in daily life so, it should
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 in school
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. In conclusion, there are two views
in
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 learning
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Firstly
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, it is not important because it
replaced
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 by
computer
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computers
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 and calculators.
Secondly
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,it is significant and
their
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 are
a
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benefits of studying
this
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such
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 as improving memory and solving
problems
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 skills.
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