The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada students from 1992 to 2007.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada students from 1992 to 2007.
The graph gives information about how many male and female students graduated from Canadian universities between 1992 and 2007. Despite, the
overall
rise in
number
was not steady, the trends for male and female students were similar.
Additionally
, the gap between them widened over the period as more women than men graduated.
Graduates
number
rose during the 15 years and reached their highest levels in 2007, but there were always more female than male
graduates
. In 1992, the difference was less marked, with just over 70,000 males and about 100,000 females.
However
, by 2007 there had been more significant growth in female
numbers
. That year, they rose to 147,000, compared to just 95,000 males.
Thus
the gap between the
number
of male and female
graduates
had
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widened. A more detailed look at the graph reveals that the
overall
growth in
numbers
was not always steady. Between 1992 and 1995, there was a slight increase. That was followed by a period of about five years, when
numbers
fell,
then
flattened out at just over 70,000 for men and 100,000 for women. After 2000,
however
, graduate
numbers
saw their strongest growth rate, and
this
was well above the increases that had been seen in the early 1990s. Clearly, there were similar trends for male and female
graduates
over
this
period, but the
number
of women graduating increased at a higher rate than the
number
of men.
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