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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your own opinion.

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 myriad documentary news, movies and articles, Studying
history
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 has been being fascinating topic for centuries. There is a popular
quoto
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quote
 in our nationality "If you don't know your
history
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, you are
same
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the same
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 as
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a losting
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losting
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losing
 monkey in the forest". Our past creates our present and future;
thus
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 I
agreed
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 completely that
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past
history
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 could help us better understand the present. It gives us
the
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apply
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many opportunities to
develope
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develop
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such
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us
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as
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 science and daily life and it makes our lives more interesting.
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 ancient people
gives
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us
the
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fire
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that
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 is the main factor of our needs. The
Worlds
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seven
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 wonderer is still human best wishes to see.The feat of
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studying
history
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 is countless. Ancient people give us the structure of country,
states
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state
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, and family. They discovered many places, invented a large number of technologies and left them
us
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to us
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. They
makes
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 our lives easier. People, who think
history
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 has nothing or little to tell us, have their own
eplanation
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explanation
explanations
on
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of
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 that
popic
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topic
. I have no chance to
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judge
 them.
Eveything
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Everything
 has
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two
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 sides. Maybe adolescents are more
uniterested
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interested
uninterested
 in
history
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. Because in
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teenage
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, their life is busy and they have no time to consider about it.
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, We have our babies read about our histories more. If we could do it, it'll
bing
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bring
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 up our child in
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the right
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 hand
instead
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 of us.
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