in many countries paying for things using mobile phones (cell phone ) apps is becoming increasingly common .Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages

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life. It has made almost all activities very much easier. It has given us many benefits. One of the main benefits
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today's life is ' online payment' . today I'm going to highlight
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advantages
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apps for paying. Relevant factors will be discussed in the essay below.
To begin
with, the e-commerce website
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were
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lenched
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launched
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,
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and people
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people
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and people
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were very
much
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pleased to
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their
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purchase
by online payment. It is
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easier
rather
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than carrying cash
every where
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.
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these days increasing
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of robberies and murder cases because of money.
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the kind of these incidents people getting
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to
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their payments through
the
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online banking.
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with the development of
technology
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the government sectors and
privet
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private
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sectors
also
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to
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the online payments . As
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example
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privet schools
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opportunity
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to parents to do their children's school payments
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online.
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parents can save their time with busy lifestyle.
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people can go anywhere, anytime to do their business without
hanging
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money.
For
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if someone wants to buy some
furnitures
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, they can
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the
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bank transfer or the e cash payment. It is
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than past and more comfortable. In
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using
e- cash
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e-cash
or
using
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mobile banking
transfer
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transfers
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are more
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easier and
safe
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safer
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in these
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to
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life.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mobile payments
  • Biometric authentication
  • Transaction costs
  • Budgeting
  • Technological barriers
  • Privacy concerns
  • Data breaches
  • Identity theft
  • Over-reliance
  • Market fragmentation
  • Competing payment apps
  • Financial inclusion
  • Security features
  • User convenience
  • Cashless transactions
  • Digital wallet
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