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Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, countries are possibly maintaining hygiene and economic status. Some believe that it is sustainable and others disagree. I strongly believe that the country can make it without damaging the environment. Though,
this
 essay is going to discuss both views elaborately and provide my opinion
at the end
. On one hand, many regions in the world are struggling to protect our surroundings. The government ought to implement some vital policies to control
this
 issue.
For example
, big industries, most of them destroying the forest and building
modem
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 companies. Through
this
, the
constitution
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 earns more money and grows our nation's economy.
Moreover
, the government should penalize them and stop
this
 kind of money-making.
Therefore
, it will reduce the rate of damage to our surroundings and
get
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benefits
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for
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the country's growth.
On the other hand
, some think that it will be hard to manage the nation's well-being without destroying the forest.
In addition
, they opine that economic status is the main priority for the region rather than
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preventions
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 of nature.
For instance
, water bores and petrol. It is very essential for society's convenience.
Thus
, they can get profits from soil import and export among trade even helps to earn more money and saves the society financially.
To conclude
,
although
 it is workable for the nation to achieve both financial growth and
taking
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 care of nature even though it has a few drawbacks. In my opinion, it is undoubtedly true that a country
both
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 economically successful and has a clean environment with cooperation of rules and regulations.
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