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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goos reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's ,world most people buy things that only came up to their mind because of advertising.
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 play a big role in today's world, You can see that if go to any type of city whether they're poor or rich or just between these two you will see that the number of
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 for brands and malls is outrageous. The amount of
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 causes people in the city to buy things that they might not even need. I find
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 to be very disturbing. mark
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 may help you remember what item you need to buy
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 is rarely the case. Most
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 only think about their profit-making and money
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 becomes clear the more you look closer into them, Some wholesale sections on TV tell you to your face that you need to buy
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 item.
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 others are less clear about their real feelings about selling to you, They might show you a sitcom that will never happen in real life but it is only built to make you feel that you need to buy
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 coffee or
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 waterproof mat or that water cooler, The list goes on and on which
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 proofs my point. In my ,mind I see these as the most frequent types of
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 on TV and on the streets,
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 type of sale is a play that big greedy companies play on normal people and children who will grow up watching these greedy
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. And have there mindset that they need to buy worthless things to be happy.

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