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Nowadays,a growing number of people with health problem are trying alternative medicines and treatment instead of visiting their usual doctor

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatment #doctor
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In globalization, in my perspective, the infrastructure of the medical hub has several solutions to overcome a number of diseases either the ordinary or alternative solution,
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, some categories of the population have an opportunity to find the appropriate ways that are suitable for them.
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, despite the traditional treatment that everyone knows
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 usually used using
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 method, it has many problems for someone who has a condition which is not suitable for it. To illustrate
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, someone who is poor
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 living in the up-country does not possibly face most excellent doctors who work in the urban,
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, these people do have not the potential to get rid of some diseases that need specific doctors only.
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, in emerging countries are lack of specific doctors significantly causes to their citizens be responsible for go to abord to face a specialised person which is not only time-consuming but spends a huge amount of money.
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, nowadays the earth has alternative methods that have right to solve
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 problem for ones,
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, telemedicine launched amid the spread of the covid-2019 is the best means for somebody having numerous issues that are not suitable for normal solutions to poor people and someone living provincal state
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.
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,
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 method doesn’t need an amount of money to go abroad or be time-consuming because should
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 infrastructure be used by the government, citizens can face the best helpers that they want.
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,
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 basic medicine has many merits, those who have various conditions are not appropriate for
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 tactic.
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, telemedicine is called the proper way in
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 age.
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