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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
future
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 all
vehicles
 will be equipped with
autopilot
 technology.
People
 will be in
a
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 role of passengers. We are living in the 21st century, where technological progress is making daily improvements and innovations. One of the widely discussed topics nowadays is
driverless
vehicles
, it is undeniable that transport has become an essential part of our everyday lives.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find
autopilot
 in
cars
 beneficial,
while
 others consider everything associated with
autopilot
systems
 negatively. Surely, there are both cons and pros to
driverless
vehicles
, but I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the main positives of
autopilot
 transport is that they are fast and reliable. Nowadays in the car ,market you will find huge amounts of
cars
 which are equipped with automatic hold
systems
, staying inside of the line and speed control
systems
. Large vehicle factories are working on
autopilot
systems
.
For example
 Tesla, they
has
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integrated
autopilot
systems
 into their car’s software since 2015. And right now they have the most reliable and efficient
driverless
 car options. Another advantage is that
people
 will not need to learn how to drive and get driving licenses,
due to
this
 fact
people
 will have more time to relax on the way to their hometown and there will be less traffic and accidents.
Autopilot
systems
 will be more effective in small cities and even in
big
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 megapolis, as a ,result it will cause essentially declining gas usage because
vehicles
 will make trips by the shortest distance possible.
Although
, it will help to protect the environment from gasoline emissions. Turning to the other side of the argument, our roads and highways are not equipped with any type of infrastructure that will allow that transportation system to work well.
For instance
, the roads don’t have enough traffic lights, painted notes and other objects which will make the transport work as they have designed. Principally, if there were only those kinds of
vehicles
, the workers
of
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 that sphere would lose their jobs and there would be more joblessness in the workforce.
Namely
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 trucks, buses and train drivers will lose their income, work and pensions.Another major disadvantage is the economy will suffer from tax cuts and that will make some kind of economic impact, because of that workers will not get any income and pay taxes to the government. Having weighed everything mentioned , we can come to the conclusion that
driverless
vehicles
 will make our lives easier, better and safer,
nevertheless
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 there will be jobless
people
. Technology is growing rapidly and we can’t stop that movement,
,
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consequently
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 the day will come when
cars
 will not need any kind of driver. Artificial intelligence will control
cars
, traffic lights, cameras and so on. Taking into consideration the above factors, is advantages overweight the disadvantages.
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