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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this a positive or a negative development?

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Many
people
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 claim that consuming other medications or therapies for
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 who have health adversities is more practical than visiting their doctor. Whether
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 ideology could be true or false is a controversial issue. From my point of view, it makes more sense to have a regular visit with a primary care physician. Developing the number of medicines independently and relying on personal expertise might be hazardous and cause
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 problems.
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, excessive consumption of diabetic drugs could damage the liver or pancreas.
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, I can expect that
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 sort of individual would increase the risk of overdosing on some medications
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 consuming them without sufficient medical knowledge
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, some
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 living on a tight budget couldn't afford doctors' visit fees;
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, it would be compulsory for them to treat themselves at home.
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, governments should be aware of
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 type of issue in order to find a solution for indigent
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,
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 as providing or importing many more drugs and medicines or reducing the cost rate of medical appointments.
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, governments are responsible for informing
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 to avoid trying alternative medicines or treatments that would be harmful to their health. Taking everything into consideration, consuming anything else except a doctor’s prescription could be detrimental to the population and might put society in danger. With
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 regard, I recommend that governments and countries should expand their medical facilities in order to be affordable for all types of
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.
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, they have to warn
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 about the perils of using alternative therapies without any advice or prescription from their doctor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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