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Describe a time you waited for a fun or nice thing. (Sep-Apr 2024) You should say: • When it happened • What the nice thing was • How long you waited • And explain how you felt about the experience

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For me, I want to talk about the long-awaited happy day of my son's
birth
. I gave
birth
 to my first son six years ago in the spring of 2017. For 10 months after learning that I had a
child
 in 2016, I waited looking forward to my first
child
 being born healthy.
While
 I was waiting for the
birth
, the process felt very mysterious and phenomenal. Listening to good music, seeing pretty pictures, and doing prenatal care for the baby in my stomach every day, I was very happy to imagine what my
child
 would look like.
And
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I usually thought working at work was the most important thing, but after pregnancy, my values changed to giving
birth
 and raising a healthy baby as the most important thing, and I wanted to change a lot of my life
according to
 that value. And I thought it was amazing and amazing that one person conceived another life and gave it to the world in good health.
Also
, seeing a
child
 who looks like me and my husband half and half, I felt the principle that each individual's genes were delivered to his or her
child
 was really amazing.
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