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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.
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The line graphs depict information about thefts per thousand private transport in four countries,
such
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 as Great Britain,
France
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,
Canada
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 and Sweden measured in 10 periods between 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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 the United Kingdom had the highest points of robberies, staying on the same level until the end of the period,
while
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 the number of thefts in
France
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 and
Canada
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 totally decreased.
However
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, Sweden had a negative tendency to the increasing number of burglaries year by year.
To begin
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 with, Great Britain in 1990 had 17 thefts per 1000 vehicles and maintained its peak at 20 in 1992, after, it fluctuated and
at the end
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 of the
last
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 period it stayed at the same point as in the beginning.
However
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,
Canada
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 and
France
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 started at the same level as 6 and 8, respectively. Both decreased in the first 4 years,
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,
France
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 had a slight rise and backed to the beginning level,
while
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Canada
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 had a fluctuating period. Fortunately, both finished and decreased at the same point as 6.5 robberies.
On the other hand
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, Sweden is the only country that had a significant increase, beginning with 8 stealing it doubled to 15 burglaries in 1999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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