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Nowadays, in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household chores equally between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In today's world, there is no discrimination against gender. People
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 equally without any problem as society's demands have increased. So, it is necessary to help each other in the family.
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, Males should have to be equally responsible as females in getting
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 done. As mentioned before, women
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 as same as men these days.
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, people prefer living in nuclear families to a joint family. So, the workload in the house should
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 be shared in two as
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work
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 the same
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.
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, if the wife is doing a
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 shift and looking after a baby
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 other
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 chores, the husband should look for a
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 shift to help his wife with babysitting. So, it can be fair to
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 of them.
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, if a woman is helping financially and
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 a breadwinner as her partner. She
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 deserves equal
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 of rest to
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 for the next
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.
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, if the woman is working full
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 in the health care department. There is a more probability of her working 12
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 a
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 and because of
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, she only left with another 12
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. During these
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, she has to manage all the housework and everything. There is no time left for her to rest. So,
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 partners should share
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 in half so
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 can rest for the next
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. In conclusion, in
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 fast-changing lifestyle, men and women
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 as same as each other to meet their financial needs. So, it should be better for them to share
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 as well. By doing
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, they can have quality time together and no one will get disturbed by the burden.
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