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Literature helps to develop a child's morals and feelings of humanity. As a result, from infancy to maturity, children should be given a chance to connect with litrature works. Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

Some people claim that in a child's ethics and feelings of humanity
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,
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 plays an essential role because it may foster empathy and understanding of the world. I partly agree with the viewpoint that the activities of engagement in
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 may contribute to the
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's cognitive and emotional
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 because
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 it fosters their sense of compassion and empathy, it is pivotal that
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 approach science and technology to have a comprehensive increase. On the one hand, it is popular knowledge that
literature
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 can enable
children
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 to gain a deeper comprehension of the world. By connecting with
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 activities so that they can meet myriad aspects of life,
children
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 will have a chance to acquire knowledge of some abstract notions
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 as happiness, bravery or honesty and so on;
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, their construction of
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 framework and discernment of moral principles will be able to
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, when
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 read a
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 work about the life of the impoverished and how they weather the storm, their ability to understand and sympathise with other people will be facilitated.
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, the 21st century unfolds
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 the advancement of state-of-the-art technologies and machines.
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, youngsters should have scientific acquisition
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literature
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 works, which can help them keep pace with the world's progress. Living in a society
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 experiencing numerous breakthrough inventions,
children
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 have to discover not only
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literature
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 works but
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 scientific activities and knowledge. Nowadays, there are more and more materialists;
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, science and technology should be cared
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in order not to become old-fashioned. In conclusion, the sooner youngsters can approach
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, the more cognitive and emotional maturation of
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 can be cultivated and completed.
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, the study of science is
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 a fundamental element in the moral growth and a sense of empathy in
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Task Response
Be clear about your view. State if you agree or disagree in the intro and keep this view in the body.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make one main idea in each paragraph and end it with a short line that rounds it off.
Task Response
You show a balance of ideas by talking about both sides.
Coherence and Cohesion
You give examples to show your points.
General
There is a clear ending that restates your view.
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