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Thanks to the development of air travel and telecommunication, contacts between different parts of the world have developed quickly. To what extent do you think societies benefit from the increased contact and closer relationship with foreigners brought about by international business and tourism?

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In today's globalised epoch,as an outcome of the strengthened
air
 transportation and improvements in the sector of international communications worldwide,a plethora of countries are endeavouring to make connections with each other.In my opinion , these kinds of developments can be a contributory factor for the witnessing gain of different nations.
Thus
, via
this
 ,essay I will discuss about benefits which come from the establishment of relationships with foreigners globally.          At present, presidents from a variety of societies are trying to prolong bonds with international countries resulting in several beneficial consequences.First and foremost,despite the setbacks regarding the phenomenon of racism that were not eliminated successfully in the past,  today respect is gradually mounting among folks
although
 their religion, texture or colour are discrepant.To be more tangible, after the prevalence of
air
 travelling people began to make journeys towards overseas nations which they have been dreaming of visiting
that is
 why previously disseminated ones are becoming accepted as counterparts by the civilians who scoffed at them in the past.          
Additionally
, there is another reform that obviously assists in finding relevance for people's lifestyles which embarked took into account as one of the most significant points of revolution after imposing
air
 travelling called telecommunication that via exchanging a wide range of paraphernalia , dwellers of certain locations have access to purchase commodities which brought from abroad.
For instance
, right now ,in every city in all parts of the world ,it is easy to find shops where clothes which belong to the USA brands like Nike,Puma or Adidas
due to
 the fact that approximately all countries import them
as a result
 of global correspondence.         To put it generally, I consider telecommunication and
air
 transportation as the most appropriate factors that can help to reduce racism and
also
 exchange cultural goods .
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