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Some people think that the goverment should provide free education at every level. However, some say individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 some
people
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 think that
education
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 should be free for all levels, others believe that
people
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 ought to pay for their university
education
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. In my opinion, I consider that all levels of
education
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 must be paid for by the government in order to encourage
people
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 to enter universities and to increase international students. On the one hand,
according to
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 some, the government should provide free
education
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 at every level because
everyone
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 will be encouraged to pursue their higher
education
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, and I agree.
In other words
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, poor
people
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, particularly will not be able to pay university fees, so if
education
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 is available for free,
people
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 will continue their tertiary
education
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 without any problems, and the number of
people
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 who are educated will increase.
For example
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, in Norway, the percentage of educated individuals keeps on increasing every year since
education
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 in
this
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country
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 is free.
Furthermore
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, it is often claimed that free
education
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 will increase the number of foreign students in a
country
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, so the language of the
country
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 will be used internationally.
This
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 certainly brings benefits to the
country
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.
On the other hand
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, some may claim that individuals should pay for their tuition fees. One reason behind
this
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 is that it is hard for the government to educate
everyone
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, especially if it is an underdeveloped or developing
country
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.
That is
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 to say, to provide free
education
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, it involves a large amount of money.
For instance
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, some African countries cannot provide even food for their
people
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, so it is impossible for them to have free
education
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.
Thus
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, only developed countries can think about free
education
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. Another reason is that to have a perfect
education
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, educational institutions need funds to provide the best services and facilities.
To sum up
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,
while
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people
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 may vary in their opinions. I think that
education
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 should be free for
everyone
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 because it is their right to be educated. If
education
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 were available for
everyone
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 without any payments, many nations would develop easily.
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