Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The discussion about whether or not

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is necessary to teach

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about right and wrong at an early age is a very controversial one. Some people say that

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punishing

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is needed to discipline them,

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others believe that, it should not be the only solution.

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, to a greater extent, I disagree with the statement for a bunch of plausible reasons. There are so many good reasons that can lead one to go the opposite of the statement.

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triggers harmful psychological and physiological responses. Punishments

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as spanking, slapping and other forms of physical

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not work well in correcting a child’s behaviour. In fact, I believe, that

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often fails to stop and can even increase the occurrence of wrong behaviour. Another point is that, as early as age two or three,

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can already know or feel the difference between right and wrong.

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Children

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who face consequences for their wrongdoings often tend to be stubborn and exclude themselves from society.

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, giving them consequences for doing

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actions is another way to teach them.

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, if a teacher failed a student for plagiarism

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it could prevent the student from future plagiarism.

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should not be seen as intended to harm the

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or express anger since it might lead to aggressive actions.

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, teachers could be strict

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plagiarism but they can give high marks for good research.

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, in some situations,

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is necessary to prevent students from

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, if parents could teach

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by giving reason and advice,

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might not be required.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

moral education
sense of responsibility and empathy
positive reinforcement
constructive punishment
loss of privileges
mental health
understanding of authority and discipline
ethical implications
humane and justifiable
cultural perspectives
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