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In many countries today children begin learning a foreign language before entering primary school. What are the reasons for this? At what age should children begin to learn a foreign language?

The present age is the era of technology and innovation, and
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 has turned the world into a global village. People are now closer to each other, and in order to know and communicate effectively with others it is essential to learn an international
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. In many countries, children begin learning a foreign
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 before entering primary school. There are several reasons for
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 early start.
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the world has become very competitive, international markets creating new opportunities every day, in order to avail these chances it is essential for today's
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 to prepare early, in every sector communication skills play a vital role.
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with the modern and fast mode of transportation, parents tend to take their
kids
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 with them on trips and vacations. In order to get mixed with others culture or know in depth about other country
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 is the first thing. When
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 start early can learn pronunciation and grammar more easily as compared to older learners. When
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a toddler
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 is of two or three years he does not know much about his mother tongue, so he can pronounce international words with more ease. Currently, there is no research evidence about at which age
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 learning should begin. People have different kinds of views
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 perspective. Some suggest
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 start,
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 others give the idea until children turn seven or eight years old because in
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 way they would be able to grasp their mother tongue first. In my opinion,
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 should start learning a
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 early,
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 will help them foster their cognitive abilities and help them learn problem-solving skills.
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 could serve as a bond creation between parents and their
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, as during
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 process parents often arrange pretend play and many other activities.

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Your introduction is good, but it could be made stronger by clearly stating the main reasons for early language learning in the thesis statement.
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Ensure that each paragraph clearly focuses on a single main point and includes relevant examples to support your ideas. Some points would benefit from more specific examples or elaboration.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas smoothly using linking words and phrases. Some transitions between ideas were slightly abrupt, making it hard to follow the flow of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Consider expanding your conclusion to summarize the key points you have discussed. A strong conclusion reinforces your main ideas.
task achievement
You have a good understanding of the topic and present valid reasons for why children should learn a foreign language early.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • bilingualism
  • problem-solving skills
  • critical period hypothesis
  • language acquisition
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • open-mindedness
  • globalization
  • career prospects
  • multilingualism
  • pre-primary education
  • play-based learning
  • pronunciation
  • grammar
  • job market
  • language proficiency
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