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Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Do you agree or disagree?

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We are all born on the same planet, but some of us have good lives, and some have exactly the opposite. Is it our destiny, or do we have the chance to retrieve only the good things so as to have a better
life
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? One of the major subjects is our education. But in my point of view, not everything
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 learned is contained in
books
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, and for sure not learned at Schools and Universities.
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, I will start with the educational point. Almost in all societies,
kids
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 have to go to school until the age of 12 and in some countries even til the age of 16.
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, everyone has the opportunity to receive knowledge from
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 and from their teachers. A large number of young
kids
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 continue their studies after school, going to Universities. They believe and it is a fact, that a University diploma will give them better career opportunities, better incomes and a better
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 quality.
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, we can see many young
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, abandon school and reading, before the age of 16. If those
kids
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 get in a well-maintained environment, they learn communication skills, make friends and have
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 good job opportunities. Maybe with less income from the first category
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, but
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 with a good
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. Facing these two points of view, both reading and learning by
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, or learning by activity actions, are vital for our lifestyle. But
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books
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 may give us a huge spectrum of knowledge,
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, lifestyle gives us the true spectrum of real-world knowledge. Via our daily process, we are learning very important skills, that no book contains.
Books
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 are good trainers for our minds, but both manners and reactions to learning from
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, are better teachers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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