In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
It is said that,
while
the weight of Individuals has been going up, their levels of overall
wellness and training have been going down in some nations. Although
there are some fundamental reasons for these issues such
as eating more unhealthy foods compared to before, there are some steps to tackle these problems.
On the one hand, many members of society, tend to eat more unhealthy foods these days. One idea is that,
youngsters are more likely to be influenced by advertisements about different kinds of snacks namely candies and chocolate and many college students tend to eat more junk food, as it is much cheaper and a lot tastier than many of the healthy dishes. Remove the comma
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Moreover
, many of the workforce find it more convenient to pick up a ready meal form
the supermarket which is Correct your spelling
from
in
most occasions, full of detrimental additives, fats, salt, and sugar. Change preposition
on
For example
, in many universities and companies around the world, the number of people who ordered fast food was much more than the ones, whom
had healthy, home-cooked dishes. Change the pronoun
who
On the other hand
, many individuals do not find time to do exercises regularly just because they are over-occupied with work or school. They spend many hours studying or working, which actually mostly includes sitting, and in the long term this
can cause many physical health disorders such
as cardiovascular diseases or obesity.
There are some ways to tackle such
problems such
as preparing dishes beforehand, for example
on the weekends, which contain all necessary nutrients, as well as
cutting back on the snacks that are full fat
and sugar. Reducing the working hours by managers can be considered as a plan to free some time in Change preposition
of fat
employers
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employees
schedule
and even giving them free gym memberships would encourage them to work out more. Correct subject-verb agreement
schedules
University’s
administrations Change noun form
University
on
the other hand, can employ policies to foster the spirit of training Add the comma(s)
,on
into
students. Change preposition
in
However
, they should also
cut back on the amount of imposed pressure on students, so that they can spend some time doing others
things.
In conclusion, the root of these issuesCorrect quantifier usage
other
,
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effects
of Correct article usage
the effects
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
life-style
but they can be solved by substituting some simple ideas Correct your spelling
lifestyle
such
as reducing the amount of work and trying to maintain a balanced diet.Submitted by t4r4neh.t on
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