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Education is important to help acieve success. Discuss

Nowadays youngest continue their educational paths after finishing school. They take University diplomas, master's degrees and doctorate degrees. Is
this
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 wealthy? For them yes it is because they help them to achieve their
success
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.
Success
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 might be a University teaching career, a high
position
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 in a legendary corporation business, or a place in a government
position
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. Or, it might be better incomes.
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, let's examine the fact that a good educational programme comes with good job opportunities.
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, for years I have been working as an assistant in my job, and now I have the opportunity, if I make a small effort and succeed in my English exams, to take a promotion and a place in an administrative
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. So, better
education
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 skills will give you better job opportunities.
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, if I succeed, I will have
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 an opportunity to expand my knowledge and get another diploma or a master's, in an area
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 relevant to my new
position
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. And if the second comes,
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 new horizons will be opened for carriage promotions. As we see with a conditional
education
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, we have more and more chances to succeed. And when
success
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 comes,our lives suddenly change. With more incomes and the family budget, more career doors will open and we will have a better lifestyle.
On the other hand
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, with
education
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, we become more open-minded, and we get out of the spectrum of stupidity. We learn new ways to solve problems, how to have good manners, how to be better communication partners and achieve progress. For all these, and for my
success
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, I strongly believe that
education
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 is very important to help me achieve
success
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 in all ways. In closing, I ensure young people, never stop getting educated, because with a balanced and correct educational program, we can have big chances to succeed in all of our lifestyle sites.

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