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The table illustrates the number of American households from 1790 to 1990.

The table illustrates the number of American households from 1790 to 1990.
The table illustrates the most five popular attractions in the USA regarding the numbers of visitors from 2004 and 2017.
Overall
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, trump tower had the highest number of
tourists
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 in both years. Its number surpassed by far the number of
tourists
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 from the other attractions.
On the other hand
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, the least popular attraction was
for
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the Grand Canyon in 2004 and 2017. Looking first at the most significant features,
trump
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the trump
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 tower was the most visited attraction in the United States. It stood at 870
thousand
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of
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tourists
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 in 2004 and increased to 952
thousand
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of
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visitors in 2017. Followed by Disneyland which received 364
thousand
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of
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tourists
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 in 2004 and
increase
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 slightly to 375 after thirteen years. Yellowstone
national park
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National Park
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, which had the fourth position on the list in 2004, after the
golden gate bridge
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Golden Gate Bridge
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 increased marginally
up
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to 252
thousand
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of
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tourists
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.
In contrast
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, the Grand Canyon only had 110
tourists
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 in 2014 and declined even more to 108
thousand
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 in 2017. Surprisingly, the
golden gate bridge
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Golden Gate Bridge
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 witnessed the largest decline
from
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in
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 the period from 301
thousand
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of
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tourists
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 to 234
tourists
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Societal transformation
  • Urbanization
  • Migration
  • Technological advancements
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic growth
  • Housing market
  • Family dynamics
  • Average family size
  • Divorce rates
  • Single-person households
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