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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 addicted to boosting the
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 in their
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.
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, there are opposite views. In my opinion,
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 are not only economic growth but could do much more to improve different issues. There are key reasons why economic growth is seen as a fundamental goal for countries.
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, a healthy
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 results in job creation, a high level of employment, and better salaries for all citizens.
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, economic progress ensures that more money is available for
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 to spend on infrastructure and public services.
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, a government with high revenues can invest in the
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's transport network, education system and hospitals.
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, a strong
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 can help a
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's standing on the global stage, in terms of political influence and trading power.
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, I would argue that various other forms of progress are just as significant as the economic factors mentioned above.
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,
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 should consider the areas of social justice, human rights, equality and democracy.
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, the treatment of minority groups is often been ignored by moral standards that
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 can set laws to stand for them. Another key consideration is how to make it environment friendly. Improving the progress of the modern
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 usually produces pollution;
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,
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 have a responsibility to move towards environmental sustainability.
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, the success of a nation could be measured by looking at the health, well-being and happiness of residents. In conclusion, the
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 is obviously a key maker of a
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's success, but human rights, eco-environment and healthcare are equally vital and significant.

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task response
Address all parts of the task to earn a higher score. Consider providing more balanced arguments for and against economic progress as the main goal for countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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