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You are visiting a town where you once worked. Write to a friend you worked with there. Include the following in your letter: •Tell your friend about your life now. •Give him/her details of your visit. •Arrange how you can meet.

#town #friend #•tell #life #•give #visit #•arrange
Dear Rose, I am writing to my friend who I worked with in Korea two years ago.
Hello
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 my friend. I currently live in Chicago, USA and work as a manager in a large company. I am currently working on a big project. My life has changed a lot. One of them I bought a big house in Chicago and
also
 a Mercedes Benz car. I got used to
this
 city very quickly and these places became a part of my life. Darling Rose, I recently finished all my work and decided to go back to Korea for a few days. My visit is to remember old times with you. Rose, but I do not know how to meet you and I do not even know where you live. So I have a good suggestion. There was a coffee shop that we liked in front of the company where we used to work. What do you say we meet here? I will wait for you at that coffee shop on March 23rd at 6 oʻclock in the evening. I hope you will come. Yours sincerely, Nigina.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure you have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance logical flow. Although the letter demonstrates some structure, the transition between ideas could be smoother.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain a more consistent and friendly tone throughout your letter, suitable for writing to a friend. The language occasionally appears formal for the context.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and link your ideas more smoothly with appropriate connectors to improve coherence.
Task Achievement
When arranging a meeting, provide alternative suggestions or ask for the recipient's input, making the plan more flexible and considerate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reminisce
  • catch up
  • nostalgia
  • reconnect
  • schedule
  • itinerary
  • leisure
  • colleagues
  • advancements
  • enthusiasm
  • regularly
  • updates
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