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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. HelShe has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter give details of the course you took at the university ◦ explain why you recommend the university give some advice about how to apply

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Dear Paul, Hello, how are you? I hope everything is going well. I am writing to give you some advice about the theatre course which I have been there for two years. I am so happy because
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 course gives me confidence and happiness. Let me explain my situation in more detail.
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, I am part of AUTT which is the name of my club. We're preparing games.
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 Romeo and Juliet, Macbeth, and Hamlet. I had a role as Juliet. It was a magnificent experience for me. We have to read a lot of games to learn the method. Our teachers are so kind and knowledgeable people.
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, we have a hectic study schedule so, we have to work hard.
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, I highly recommend playing a game as an actor.
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, I know, you're a suitable person for the scene. You have a friendly smile and skills. Do you remember, you and I always played games
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 why, I know you are fit for the scene. Can I suggest applying directly, you should fill out the application form and
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 they will call you for audiences. After all interviews, they would be able to accept you. That's all, please be careful about your CV. It would be perfect. Please let me know if you decide to apply. I look forward to hearing from you. Your friend, Ecem

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using more paragraphs to clearly separate your ideas and make the structure more logical. For example, every main point could be in its own paragraph.
task achievement
Try to use a more formal tone when addressing your friend, especially in the beginning. Using 'Dear' is good, but the following sentences could be more structured and polished.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors which can slightly affect clarity. Phrases like 'I have been there for two years' could be clearer if rephrased to 'I have been studying this course for two years.'
task achievement
Your enthusiasm for the course is very clear, which is a great way to encourage your friend to apply.
coherence and cohesion
The personal anecdotes about your experience add a nice touch and make your recommendation more compelling.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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