The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.,

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over

a six-month period in 2011.,
The line chart illustrates the numerical details obtained from three different sources by the Tourist Information Office in a city for the first half of 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest amount of information was gathered verbally.
while
, the source of the letter/email declined, and details collected over the phone fluctuated throughout the six
months
. In terms of inquiries sustained in person, in the first 3 ,
months
there was a similar percentage increase.
However
, from March to June, the figures dramatically increased, starting from just over 400 and reaching approximately 1900 in the month of June.
However
, it can be noticed that the method of collecting information by phone from January to April had different fluctuations. Almost 900 queries were gathered in January,
then
declined by 800. In March, the number climbed to 1000, between March and April, the figures remained steady and in the final three
months
, there was a significant increase to 1600.
On the other hand
, access to details by letter or email dramatically decreased during the given period of time. Out of the three methods of collecting data, the number of letters and emails declined in six
months
, starting at slightly over 750 and decreasing to 400.
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