It is suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many argue that growing
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and looking after pets should be among the activities that
children
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do in primary school. I believe it has more benefits than downsides.
Children
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can learn to care for living things other than humans and
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, they can gain a
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of knowledge about
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and
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that might come in handy one day.
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, some of the parents are afraid of the dangers that come with these tasks.
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, to take care of a tree, or even a cat,
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must do a
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of research about them, what environment they need to prepare and
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, what to feed them. So, they learn too much about
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and
plants
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in general and it will help them in the future especially if they become a harvester or animal keeper.
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, every step they take to know their
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better, reinforces the sense of caring for another being, in the child which
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, will lead to a more responsible and caring person in
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adulthood.
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pet owners' brain images, scientists have proven that their brain areas specific to caring and social part taking
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much
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stronger than
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of
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ordinary people.
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, it is a great practice for
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to look after other beings it teaches them a
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.
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, parents are really worried about the possible consequences these lessons will bring for
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children
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.
Plants
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and
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usually live in the wild and so, to interact with them,
children
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have to deal with a
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of bacteria and microbes and
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, they are more prone to get sick.
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,
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and
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usually die at
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age and because
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are so kind and vulnerable, it might leave them heartbroken for the rest of their lives.
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, I have heard stories about my cousin's childhood when he lost his dog. He was so attached to his dog that he became depressed and still after more than a decade, he sometimes remembers his late dog and gets sad.
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, dealing with
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and vegetables will
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pose some threats to our physical and mental health.
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, a
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of parents disagree with the idea of their
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having to take care of a pet or even a bush. But, I think the probability of getting sick from your own pet, if you take them to the
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regularly, is tiny and
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, should not be of their concern.
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, giving up on so many advantages
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as gaining knowledge and becoming responsible, just for
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small chance of getting sick, is wrong.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • cultural literacy
  • hands-on experience
  • nutritional awareness
  • curriculum integration
  • time management
  • resource allocation
  • school gardening projects
  • animal husbandry
  • ecosystem education
  • dietary habits
  • work ethic
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