Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
believe that
people
who read
books
can increase their mindset, imagination and language skills better than who
people
watch
TV
.
This
choice has a number of benefits and drawbacks which will be discussed in
this
essay. I completely do not believe
this
opinion , because many
people
only watch
TV
or other social media,   maybe these
people
are lazy and deadbeat  . To be honest , I think watching movies and comedy films doesn't help in many
people
's future. And many
people
prefer to watch
TV
but
that is
a really bad habit.
TV
programs and social media become harmful things . It is harmful to all
people
's brains and diseases arise.
Furthermore
,
people
who read
books
develop brains and horizons like a world view, and all
people
can try
this
idea bright working but all
people
try it and many
people
not try and
this
type of person constitutes lazy and again deadbeats. For ,example many
people
read a lot of
books
and these
books
other countries
books
, and
this
type of
people
's self-studying other languages , these
books
helped reading skills and writing kind a speaking skills. I incidentally what type of
books
will be taking a hard look read
books
really helped all
people
outlooks and world-view. In conclusion, I really agree that
people
's mindsets like better than those who
people
's watch
TV
.
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