You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that these days, we are living in
advanced
technology era.The majority of Correct article usage
an advanced
people
spend most daily hours in front of television
screen and Add an article
the television
a television
this
would be
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apply
lead
to unhealthy habits Replace the word
leads
such
as becoming lazy people
.Moreover
,individuals also
be un connected
with their families. In Add a hyphen
un-connected
this
essay , I Will discuss this
argument, and provide my point of view.
First of all, I totally agree that television
device is considered as
an important part Change preposition
apply
in
our daily routine but Change preposition
of
also
there are a number of drawbacks. It is undeniable that most Rephrase
apply
people
use television
for entertainment purposes or to receive daily news. For instance
, Individuals spend more time in front of t.v screen watching their favorite movies , series , or even playing games.Therefore
, long
time Add an article
the long
setting
will let Fix the agreement mistake
settings
people
get countless of
bad habits Change preposition
apply
such
as being uncooperative with others, Correct word choice
and no
no
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not
communicate
with others . Wrong verb form
communicating
Moreover
, becoming lazy individuals may also
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be considerd
considerd
to the Correct your spelling
considered
consider
disadvantages
of Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
television
.
Furthermore
, most people
who addicted
to Add a missing verb
are addicted
television
have also
some of
health issues. Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, people
will be obese because lack of physical activity. To illustrate, people
prefer eat
junk foods and soft drinks rather than eating healthy food, that happens because they have no time to cook or make valuable meals. As Fix the infinitive
to eat
result
of these factors, several serious diseases Add an article
a result
such
as cancer or cardiovascular diseases may be affect
those Change the verb form
affect
people
.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that, television
have
multiple Change the verb form
has
of
disadvantages, which could affect Change preposition
apply
on
their Change preposition
apply
behavior
and quality of life Change the spelling
behaviour
such
as prevent
them Wrong verb form
preventing
to be
Change preposition
from being
socially
Change the adverb
social
people
.Moreover
, getting sever
diseases Correct your spelling
severe
are
more likely Correct subject-verb agreement
is
happens
Change the verb form
to happen
due to
the
bad habits Correct article usage
apply
such
as eating junk food which would
harms Verb problem
apply
the
health .Correct article usage
apply
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