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The city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.

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Introduction
The
map
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 illustrates plans for
construction
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the construction
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 of two new shopping malls which
was
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were
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 proposed by the
city
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 planners in Brandfield
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city
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City
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.
In
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 the
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map
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,map
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 we can find
overview
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an overview
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 of
an
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a
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city
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 which contains
golf
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a golf
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 course,park,housing
estate
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,
city
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center
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centre
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, industrial
estate
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,river,road,
railways
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and railways
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.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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,from the
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map
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 it is evident that two malls s1,
s2
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and s2
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 which are in ,consideration
to
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for
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construct
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construction
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 it is located
in
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on
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north
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the north
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 and south side of the
city
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.It is
sourrounded
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surrounded
 by key features like roads and railways.
Body paragraph 2
The proposed mall s1
it
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apply
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is situated in
north
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the north
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.It is
sourrounded
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surrounded
 by
residentital
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residential
estate
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 to the
North-West
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northwest
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. There is a road in the north which
pass
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passes
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 through
housing
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a housing
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estate
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. There is a river and railway situated in
east
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the east
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 and south respectively. Another mall s2 lies in
south
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the south
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 of the
city
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 which is
sourrounded
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surrounded
 by roads in
west
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the west
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 and railways to
its
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the
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 east.
Conclusion
The
city
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map
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 contains
Golf
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a Golf
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 court and
park
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a park
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that is
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reprsented
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represented
 with green colour
is
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in the west. There is a
city
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center
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centre
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that is
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 in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of the
city
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. And
Industrial
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the Industrial
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 area to the east of the
city
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • economic impact
  • accessibility
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • environmental implications
  • sustainability
  • commercial development
  • site comparison
  • local community
  • consumer behavior
  • retail ecosystem
  • zoning regulations
  • footfall
  • parking facilities
  • green spaces
  • land use
  • civic amenities
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