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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar graph illustrates the most preferable subjects
such
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 as social
science
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,
science
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, language,
craft
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/drawing and sports in two different schools with their classrooms with division.
Overall
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, most of the
students
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 selected their favourite
subject
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 from
school
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 A is sports.
While
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 from
school
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 B
students
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 choose to go for
craft
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/Drawing and fewer teenagers have taken their
subject
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science
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. As per the bar chart, the
school
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 A
students
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 were more interested in sports activities than 36. On the other ,hand the second largest pupils took
Science
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 9.
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, 6 youngsters participated in social
science
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 among all
students
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 followed by the language classes 5.
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, fewer
students
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 were interested in
craft
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/ drawing subjects
such
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 as 4 people.
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,
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school
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 B is popular in
craft
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/ drawing activities around 25
students
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 and the second most loved
subject
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 is a language almost 18 teenagers took admission as their most preferred
subject
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. Social
science
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 only 6 of them show some learning interest.The
last
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 two
subject
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 sport and
science
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 was the least interesting subjects and among all the student only 2 and 5 of them took it as their favourite
subject
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science, craft, students, subject, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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