IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#bar #information #subjects #students #two #middle #schools #school #b #features #comparisons
This
 bar graph illustrates the most preferable subjects
such
 as social
science
,
science
, language,
craft
/drawing and sports in two different schools with their classrooms with division.
Overall
, most of the
students
 selected their favourite
subject
 from
school
 A is sports.
While
 from
school
 B
students
 choose to go for
craft
/Drawing and fewer teenagers have taken their
subject
science
. As per the bar chart, the
school
 A
students
 were more interested in sports activities than 36. On the other ,hand the second largest pupils took
Science
 9.
Moreover
, 6 youngsters participated in social
science
 among all
students
 followed by the language classes 5.
However
, fewer
students
 were interested in
craft
/ drawing subjects
such
 as 4 people.
While
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
school
 B is popular in
craft
/ drawing activities around 25
students
 and the second most loved
subject
 is a language almost 18 teenagers took admission as their most preferred
subject
. Social
science
 only 6 of them show some learning interest.The
last
 two
subject
 sport and
science
 was the least interesting subjects and among all the student only 2 and 5 of them took it as their favourite
subject
.
Submitted by pr6272189 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words science, craft, students, subject, school with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
What to do next:
Look at other essays: