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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agre or disagree?

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Many
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 believe that
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 who read
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 can increase their mindset, imagination and language skills better than those who
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 watch
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 choice has a number of benefits and drawbacks which will be discussed in
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 essay. I completely do not believe
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 opinion, because many
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 only watch
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 or other social media, maybe these
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 are lazy and deadbeat. To be honest, I think watching movies and comedy films doesn't help in many
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's future. And many
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 prefer to watch
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 but
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 a really bad habit.
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 programs and social media become harmful things. It is harmful to all
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's brains and diseases arise.
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,
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 who read
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 develop brains and horizons like a world view, and all
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 can try
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 try it and many
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 not try and
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 type of person constitutes lazy and again deadbeats. For ,example many
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 read a lot of
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 and these
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 other countries
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, and
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's self-studying other languages, these
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 helped reading skills and writing kind a speaking skills. I incidentally what type of
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 will be taking a hard look read
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 really helped all
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 outlooks and world-view. In conclusion, I really agree that
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's mindsets like better than those who
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's watch social media.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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